“You hurt me. I don’t know what you did to me, but you hurt me because I wanted your stupid cats. You hurt me on purpose and I’m telling my dad.“
I mean, what kind of 15/16-yo girl that fight and then threatened “to tell her dad”?
It also overly detailed, does the author tried to incorporate purple prose in this book too? There are a lot of descriptions that could be cut off.
As they watched the helpless babies, tears welled in Aggie’s eyes. “Somebody threw these babies away like they were garbage.” One shiny orb overflowed and trickled down her cheek.
Okay, I don’t think you need to describe tears in that way? Also since Aggie cries a lot in this book, we get a lot of “tears/orb trickled/rolling down” her face thing, which is not necessary. I know how crying looks like thanks.
“Okay. Say hello to Jackie and Sakari”, Sonja smiled in her direction then turned back to the show flickering on their big 60-inch flat screen.
I’m sorry but I don’t see the relevance of how big her tv is to the story. Also the description definitely doesn’t fit her family condition. (her mom work in a library and her father is unemployed but they could afford 60 inch flat screen?)
It also tries to be hip and cool by incorporating texting slangs, social media (PeoplePlace) that’s basically facebook, and swearing. And lastly, it doesn’t focused on Aggie only. We get insight of Sonja hanging out with her friends, Bishop and Billy talk, the teacher talks, and worse, seeing John and Sonja, Billy and his wife, and Mr, Dennings and his wife PDA-ing. No, I don’t want to see parents PDA-ing and the warmth and giggles and the FEELINGS that spread between them. It’s really unrelevant to the story.
Each chapter is really short, but nothing happened really since like I said, this book has too many things going on and it took a lot of set up, so the pacing is crawling. I’m 50% in and I’m waiting for something big to happened and when it does happened it MAKES ME SO MAD. I literally cried because I just WHY. After all this problems you had in this book and set up you really have to add more issues?? I also think that was the point I actually considered dnf ing this book for real.
I think I would enjoy the romance, because it’s written as one of my favorite tropes, but the execution is just NO. The way she acted whenever the love interest do something is just ridiculous. Easily blushed, “jelly legs” and so on. It makes me cringe and wonder why does the romance exists in the first place.
- Why Aggie’s father be unemployed out of nowhere? At the beginning they’re one big happy family and then suddenly the story shows that Aggie’s father is a drunk unemployed. There’s totally no mention that he was fired or anything before.
- Jane. What the hell was her problem? From the beginning she’s being a huge bitch. And can’t Aggie see that Jane doesn’t actually consider her as her friends? Friends don’t treat each other like that. And after Jane found out Aggie has been gossiping about her she goes “jane will come around”. Gurl, how dumb could you be? If I asked you to help my brother, and then he died, my family fell apart at his funeral, and I caught you telling people about my family business, I would not, at any moment, come back to you. Screw you. My brother’s death might not be your fault, but YOU HAVE NO RIGHT TELLING PEOPLE ABOUT MY FAMILY PROBLEMS.
- The rape scene. WHY DID SHE GET OUT OF HER FUCKING ROOM? Why did she acted brave and then can’t defend herself? And why doesn’t she ask for help? Yes she was threatened, but I think she’s a tough girl, she could handle uncle pervie? HA. (I’m sorry but at this point I lost all the care I had left for Aggie) I know, it’s her house and she could go anywhere she wants, but have some sense ffs. I mean, can’t she just tell her mother??? I literally cried not because I feel bad, but because I’m so pissed.
- Also, if I am Sonja, I’d left John since God knows when. Inviting his pedophile brother to live with his family even though he has a daughter is a BIG NO. Refusing to find a job and drink all the time, embarassing her daughter birthday party, and just being a useless shit in general. NOPE.
- The ending. Marriage? Really? They’re only 16/17. It’s a rash decision, and just ridiculous. Also, are those people really smart or what? Aggie’s grades was horrible during the whole ordeal, and yet she get into Harvard. Jackie to Julliard, and other characters to other famous uni. Just be realistic, it’s not that easy to get to those university. So yeah, another ridiculous thing.
In conclusion, I’m very very dissapointed. I was expecting for magic, but it was barely exists and instead I got this whole mess. From what I read, the magic element is an analogy for religion/consience. This book has too much going on, and instead of following one single plot, it keeps adding more and more issues. It’s an okay coming of age read, but the whole mess and experience really left a bad impressions for me. If only the (sorry!) useless magical element erased, I would enjoy the story more.